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Feb 18, 2010
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by: Anonymous

thanks nathan for your comment, frankly speaking this idea came into my mind before matrix came out, yes i have seen videodrome, time machine & lots of similar genre. now this is just a plot, i have ots of sub plots in my mind which i assure will not be cliche. thanks.

Feb 17, 2010
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The Good, The Bad, and The Ugly
by: Nathan Lawrence

The Good: You have succeeded in creating a story that fuses many other attractive films. Personally, I wasn't a fan of The Matrix, but that's water under the bridge.

I am, however, a big fan of Videodrome, to which this bears many similarities. If that's the direction you're going, make it clearer. If you have never seen Videodrome, I suggest you rent it or watch it on YouTube. You may find that your premise is not as unique as you suspected.

The Bad: I would like to direct your attention to the following quote from your pitch:

"She meets a wizard name Maximus. He makes gadgets & gizmos. She has the dvd remote in hand, when she presses next chapter they find themselves in between Trojan war, she lost her remote in the middle of the battle."

What? This story has gone from intriguing to cliché in one fell swoop. In order to keep this story interesting, you should change the character of this "wizard" to something else.

Currently, your plot thickens with a time machine. This may work, but it means that you will have to avoid all of the pitfalls associated with that particular plot device.

The Ugly: Decide on your audience. Are you making a film for small children or their parents? Who do you want to see this? Once you determine that, then you can move on to create a more decisive story.

Oct 01, 2009
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by: Areful Eeslam

Thanks jonathon for your comment. I'd certainly love to advertise this idea to transform into movie. I will look at your idea too.

Sep 30, 2009
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Great Idea
by: Shaded Tree Studios

Wow. That is a very good idea. Your film sounds like it would be very good. If you need help advertising your film I will be glad to help you. I am also trying to film a movie. Check out my film, The Third Hour. Please comment and add your true opinion on my idea. Thank You!

Jonathon

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